Family and Caregiver Schizophrenia Discussion Forum

Poem for my Mom's birthday


#1

So, I m terrible at expressing how I feel through actions. Most of the time, I write out my feelings to people. I stutter a lot and sometimes am hard to understand. As a result, my mother sometimes things I do not think much of or about her. However, this is not true. Tomorrow is her birthday, and I decided to write her a poem. So…I need critique, because I don’t want her to be confused or get the wrong message.
So,errrr here is a random poem -_-

I do not think anyone could be
As caring as you are to me.

Your smile grants the day new life;
Your love melts away my strife.

A love that’s pure–by hell untouched.
The love my mother gives so much.

In blaze of storms you grow your will–
A glowing soul no challenge can kill.

And so, I yell to all the Earth:
God bless the anniversary of Mother’s birth!

…yeah :grimacing:


#2

Sure, it’s fine. Mother’s love stuff like that from their kids.


#3

This mother would absolutely love to receive this from one of my children. It is beautiful and you are a very thoughtful person to create that for her. She will cherish it forever!


#4

That is the most awesome poem. If my son sent that to me I would cherish it always.


#5

How did your mother like the poem? My guess is that she loved it.


#6

She hasn’t seen it yet. On her birthday, she feel ill on her birthday morning(she has been a bit sickly the past year or so). I am still going to give it to her, however. I just want to give it to her when she has recovered. She has been very tired and resting a lot. I think she will be up again by Friday. I will give it to her then. I’ll keep you guys updated :smile:


#7

My thought is to give it to her while she’s ailing. It might cheer her up!


#8

It’s a beautiful poem and she will love it!